by
Ally Shields
Writing is fun.
It's the publishing end that makes us tear out our hair. I made many mistakes
in the process, but I'm only highlighting those that resulted putting my work
out there before it was ready.
My first query
letter was vague, something about a witch who solved crimes, nothing about the
specific plot. A more experienced writer suggested I follow this checklist:
·
Condense the story to a one-page synopsis.
·
Condense it further to an elevator pitch.
·
Write a logline.
I couldn't believe
how difficult this was, and I didn't understand the term, logline. It also
became clear I didn't understand my basic plot. If I didn't get it, how could an agent, editor or
reader? I went back to the story, adding and deleting, to clarify the storyline.
(For help with loglines and elevator pitches try this site: http://writingnorthidaho.blogspot.com/2011/10/blurbs-for-success-loglines-elevator.html.
A good discussion of the synopsis can be found here: http://www.huffingtonpost.com/holly-robinson/book-synopsis-tips_b_2426724.html.)
As soon as I
passed the plot check, I jumped into the query process and received good
initial responses. Unfortunately, my writing didn't live up to the query, and
interest dwindled. Why? Because the first round of editing was up to me, as the
writer—not the grammar and typos that everyone looks for—but passes through my
manuscript looking for specific problems.
1. Point of View: Is it consistent and clear
throughout, without head hopping? Check here for an in-depth discussion: http://www.dbjackson-author.com/blog/index.php/2012/03/01/writing-tips-point-of-view-and-voice-part-i-overview/.
2. Five senses: Is
each major scene grounded with as many of the five senses as possible without
becoming artificial? Sight and hearing are easiest, but smell, taste and touch
can often be added with just a little effort. The payoff is adding a richness
that allows readers to share the experience.
3. Backstory/narrative:
Backstory and narrative slow the pace of your story. Limit both to only what is necessary and dish it out
in small amounts.
4. Over-used and/or
weak words and phrases: Skipping this pass can ruin a good story by making it
seem amateurish. I've found a program that helps (Cliche Cleaner), but
my editor finds other words I've missed. My over-used words change: in one book
it was eyebrows, in the next stared. My next word obsession was well. I use the Find function to ferret out weak, tired, or vague words: just,
that, few, several, most. A longer list is on this website: http://goinswriter.com/weak-words/.
5. Pacing: Are the
scenes in the right order with enough variation in intensity to keep the reader
turning the pages? Take a look at structure forms, such as Blake Snyder's Beat
Sheet: http://www.blakesnyder.com/tools/.
I spent three
years writing, submitting, rewriting, and abandoned the project twice. I
changed names, POV. Gradually, I figured out the issues, but failure was a
harsh teacher. I burned a lot of publishing bridges and collected 167
rejections. Finally, I sat down and rewrote the manuscript from the beginning
using everything I learned during all those required passes. When finished,
I submitted Awakening the Fire, a
Guardian Witch story, to three small presses. Two responded immediately,
and I signed with one.
The book became a
series: two books are published, a third coming in July. I have an approved
story-arc for seven. It was a rough journey with a big payoff. I guess I
learned a thing or two along the way.
Ally
Shields is the pen name of Janet L Buck, a writer born and raised in the
Midwest, along the Mississippi River, the setting for her urban fantasy series.
After a career in law and juvenile
justice, she turned to full-time writing in 2009, and Awakening the Fire, the debut novel in her Guardian Witch series,
was released in September 2012. The
author still lives in the Midwest with her Miniature Pinscher dog, Ranger. When
not writing, reading or visiting her grown sons, she loves to travel in the US
and abroad. Way too often she can be found on Twitter.
Contact
links:
Website:
http://allyshields.com
Twitter:
http://twitter.com/ShieldsAlly
Facebook:
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